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   Blueautumn88 on July 26, 2020 at 6:41 pm

   Vulnerable, open to the healing

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   NC Overtone on July 27, 2020 at 1:46 pm

   Simple and yet thought-provoking. Nicely done.

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   Monica Anders on July 27, 2020 at 1:48 pm

   I want to go there it speaks to me

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   Chris on July 28, 2020 at 11:07 am

   Brevity which is visual and says quite a lot. Nicely penned.

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   Alan W Graham on July 29, 2020 at 1:48 pm

   Very good Yakira. You have painted a very positive picture of her situation. It’s great to have an optimistic outlook. Just one small thing I noticed, should the my in line one be a her to be consistent?Take care,

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   Richard on July 30, 2020 at 4:24 pm

   Obviously, this is not your first poetic rodeo.
   What an strikingly bright, enchanting painting … in watercolor, it appears … the perfect choice for your lovely poem. Which came first, I wonder?
   I’m particularly taken with the imagery of your single Quatrain verse in Rhyming Couplets, one of my favorite forms.
   Your easy syntactic flow is excellent, and the soft rhymes of L1 ‘n 2 lend a gentle feel, as the feminine rhymes in L3 ‘n 4 leave a solid poetical foundation that supports the entirety very well, indeed.

   Interestingly, you’ve spoken of yourself at the onset in present; yet, it’s as tho’ your soul is being viewed throughout by you, as if it’s another entity altogether … in third party, if you will.

   I dearly love the ethereality of your poem’s timbre.
   Welcome to the Café, Kira, and thank you most sincerely for sharing! ⁓ Richard 🍃

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   Ana Papaya on July 30, 2020 at 10:34 pm

   Beautiful brevity with imagery that just pops. Love it.

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   Kevin-All Poetry on August 30, 2020 at 9:12 pm

   Good effort on this!

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   E.N. on September 17, 2020 at 5:57 pm

   i feel lifted up and held gently .. strong rhyme and rhythm .. perfect painting, which i see is yours!! well done .. the whole effect is wistful and romantic … i have “gotten away” for a while .. spending it at a friends empty cottage .. alone but not lonely .. just beautiful .. you, as i read your about me, are quite the all around artist aren’t you?! so very happy to make your acquaintance here at the Cafe’..i do my best to keep up with others here by several means … i do read RR when i can .. i follow by subscribing …i read from the live feed and go through my “friends” to find those i have not visited for a while .. still it is impossible a task eh!? hope to get to know you better Kira … right here at the Cafe’ 🙂
   E.

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